Wealthy Affiliate Review

Frequently Asked Questions

1. QUESTION:
   Any honest wealthy affiliate review?
   I'm thinking of joining wealthy affiliate but don't know if all the rave reviews could be true, does anyone have a genuine, honest review they can share?

   • ANSWER:
     You'll hear a lot of reviews about Wealthy Affiliate, but one that has struck a chord and that I know to be honest is located at http://makemoneyonline.com.au/wealthy-affiliate-review - I highly recommend anyone thinking of joining Wealthy Affiliate checks out this review as it will explain what the membership offers in a sincere, no nonsense way.

     You'll find sites that speak negatively about WA are simply trying to promote their own agenda. If you want to learn how to make money online the REAL way, then I'd recommend Wealthy Affiliate to anyone.

2. QUESTION:
   Wealthy Affiliate Review? Is Wealthy Affiliate a scam?
   Has anyone tried out Wealthy Affiliate before? It's supposed to take you from beginner internet marketer to pro marketer making 00's per day.

   I found one review here:

   http://wealthyaffiliatereviewtruth.wordpress.com

   This guy seems to be making a living off it! What do you guys think?

   • ANSWER:
     To answer your question, WealthyAffiliate.com IS real. I've seen many reviews and testimonials from many people that say it does work and the owners of the site REALLY DO help you. Only con I see about it all is that it costs you a month but depending on how much dedication you put into learning the site will tell how quick you make money. Its simply teaching you ways to market affiliate programs. What's an affiliate program? Its where you simply send a new customer to a company to try out their products or services. In return, the company pays YOU for the new lead. WealthyAffiliate.com teaches you ways of marketing people to them companies and you get paid a commission.

3. QUESTION:
   Wealthy Affiliate Review, is there any real review sites?
   I'm really interested in learning more about Affiliate Marketing. I've been thinking about Wealthy Affiliate because it looks like it's the most legit but every Wealthy Affiliate Review out there just looks like a bunch of people trying to make affiliate sales.

   I'm looking for a REAL honest opinion from a REAL member. Affiliate Marketing looks like it could work for me, since I lost my job. I need something while on unemployment to help take care of the bills. But I need the real deal, I'm trying to get ripped off, and most importantly help somebody make a sale.

   Please help, I guess I would appreciate any response, but I'm just hoping for something that's real.

   Thank you,
   Gee Gee.

   • ANSWER:
     Hi Gee Gee, I know that's hard to trust people online especially with a lot of scams proliferating on the internet. I've bought other "money making" stuffs but, honestly, Wealthy Affiliate is the real deal.

     I've been a member of Wealthy Affiliate since January 2008 - that's more than a year already (smile) - and have no regrets. You can read my experience at http://www.ask.com.ph/makemoney/

     P.S. If you're going to sign-up, DON'T SIGN-UP NOW. Wait until June 1 because WA is running a (one dollar) trial offer from June 1 to 7. This is the first time that WA is offering that so I'd really recommend that you give it a try!

4. QUESTION:
   Is Wealthy Affiliate A Scam? I Want HONEST Wealthy Affiliate Review!?
   I'm tethering on the brink of joining Wealthy Affiliate but having been scammed before I need to be 200% sure I'm doing the right thing. Is it all it's made out to be or is it one big fraud. I need to hear from real members.

   Are Kyle and Carson real? How much can I expect to make if I try hard!?

   • ANSWER:
     Hey

     Wealthy Affiliate is legit, but you must realise that it is an online learning centre that teaches you everything about internet marketing.

     They also provide you with free web hosting, keyword research tools, an article generator plus a few other handy things.

     You also get the support of the whole forum, but success really can only come from you. What you get comes from what you put in, but at least with Wealthy Affiliate you are given everything to help you succeed. All you need to do is take action.

     A few Wealthy Affiliate tutorials can be obtained I know at the below site and these really helped me make up my mind before I joined.

5. QUESTION:
   Any Accurate Wealthy Affiliate Reviews?
   Thinking of joining Wealthy Affiliate? But I'd really like to hear some real and honest Wealthy Affiliate reviews first.

   • ANSWER:

6. QUESTION:
   Is Wealthy Affiliate A Scam?
   Looking for an honest Wealthy Affiliate Review...Looking to give this place a try as I've heard the teach people how to actually run an online business pretty well, is this true or hype?

   • ANSWER:
     Not to fear, there is nothing at all to worry about if you are considering joining the Wealthy Affiliate University.

     Some folks seem to get really confused as to what WA actually is, and what it is not. Wealthy Affiliate is not a get rich quick scheme or anything of the sort, it is only an educational site dedicated to teaching folks the various techniques currently available for making money online.

     In essence, the Wealthy Affiliate University is to the online world what Harvard University is to the offline world. Simply utilizing either ones vast educational resources will not assure anyone success, but you will get the best overall and well rounded education.

     Quite simply, the Wealthy Affiliate University is one of the oldest, most comprehensive and cutting edge online educational programs currently online, set up to teach folks techniques to make money online buy establishing a business model that will last over time, in other words they focus on how to do the job right, and build a business that will stand the test of time, not just make a few bucks and then wither away.

     I've learned a good deal from Wealthy Affiliate, it's definitely not a scam, any more than any other college can be a scam. It's a sound online educational program with unmatched support structures in place to help it's students to become successful...Period

7. QUESTION:
   Does Wealthy Affiliate Work? Any accurate reviews?
   I've read a lot about internet marketing, and there seem to be quite a few different programs out there that claim to be the best. However... I noticed Wealthy Affiliate stands out, and I'm wondering - does anyone know if it really works? Or better yet, an honest review?

   • ANSWER:
     Yes, Wealthy Affiliate is actually one of, if not the BEST resource for internet marketing. If anyone is hesitant to join and make that first commitment, I found a very useful blog that documents one members experience with Wealthy Affiliate, and gives you a better idea of what to expect. Here it is: http://randyjackson.wordpress.com/
     I hope this helps, and that I see you in the WA forums soon .

8. QUESTION:
   Wealthy Review?
   Is Wealthy Affiliate for real? Can you really make 00.00's from it? I've heard that it will teach you how to make money online step-by-step.

   There's a review I found of it here:
   http://www.squidoo.com/is_wealthy_affiliate_a_scam

   I'm thinkin of joining. What do you guys think?

   • ANSWER:
     SCAM, SCAM, SCAM!!!

     Oh, did I mention it was a scam???

9. QUESTION:
   What's the Wealthy Affiliate program? and how exactly does it work?
   I've heard about this website online and I've heard it's got really positive reviews from it's members.

   Please someoene give me a review on this program.And have you used it it? do you make money? and how long before you started making money?

   Also I no nothing about online marketing will this matter?

   • ANSWER:
     Wealthy Affiliate is the best website to learn internet marketing and you don't need any experience at all. Wealthy Affiliate has all of the resources you will need to learn everything to become a successful Internet Marketer.

     I am a WA member and have been for a while now. It's the best investment you can make. I work a full-time job and have a family so I'm unable to invest the time into Internet Marketing that I'd like to but I'm consistently making an extra 0/mo. and I know I could make a lot more if I could focus all of my time on IM. I think it's a lot of fun too. I made a sale in my first week of being a WA member. I've also written a couple of articles about Wealthy Affiliate if you're interested.

10. QUESTION:
    Has anyone had any sucess (income) as a wealthy affiliate member?
    I am thinking of joing and making some income. Please a member I need a real review and your sucess.

    • ANSWER:

11. QUESTION:
    Why does every make money online deal have to be a review or scam now?
    Has anyone ever noticed that every website you now see is an affiliate that uses the words scam or review to sell something? How the heck are you supposed to find real information about something when all the "Review" websites are now owned by people that are selling the products... that's not really a fair "review" imo... that's a scam because the review is biased.
    Here's an example... how can I know for certain if this is a real review or if it's a made up one?
    http://wealthy-affiliates-review.info/

    • ANSWER:

      Have you ever wanted to work from home? For this only reason I want to like you to a website where the owner shares all ways of making money online. Did you know that you can make money using search engines or having fun online? Then visit http://incomebooster.org/ for more information

12. QUESTION:
    what can anyone tell me about their honest personal experience with Wealthy Affiliate?
    I tried reading reviews and scams about this program but there are so so many. It is all confusing, most of the reviews are self benefiting to the writer. I just want to know someones honest to God opinion

    • ANSWER:
      Haha those guys are such douches ^^

      Wealthy Affiliate is ok.

      It's not the best out there - but the information you get from it is basically the same as all the other products out there. So if you purchase you will most likely make your money back. However you have to be willing to put in the work. There are better sites out there - that not only help you make money Via affiliate marketing, but also give you the personal support.

      My favorite was/is

      www.TheMaverickMoneyFirm.com

      Good luck with your search.

      And don't get sucked into anything that asks you for 1000's of dollars.

      Cheers

13. QUESTION:
    Wealthy Affiliate University?
    Hi I'm a 14 year old teen girl and I want to make money online in a moral/easier way. I'm not trying to say I want money but not willing to work hard for it. The problem is I found this great website called wealthy affiliate university. Here is the link http://www.wealthyaffiliate.com/ ( read up on it). I found people reviewing it online, in yahoo answers, and even in youtube. Many people use it and has been making profit on it because of the helpful information. Unfortunately my parents thinks its to expensive because its per month. Is there any other free information online or even books that has top quality information. Also this may not be part of the question but do you know where I can find information about building robots like in MIT, programming, building Operating systems (OS), and business. Also don't think I'm just some uneducated teen trying to get money. I'm a straight A student so I can afford to put a few hours into this a week. Thank you in Advance.

    • ANSWER:
      As far as I know Wealthy Affiliate will soon be lowering the price from the to an optional package. Many sites out there do contain free Wealthy Affiliate tutorials whereby you can test drive at zero cost their strategies, so I highly recommend you try these out before making a decision

14. QUESTION:
    Anyone hear about Wealthy Affiliate?
    this is the website of internet marketing course. i just join it less than one month. anyone members here?

    i had put some review in my blog:
    onlinestation.blogspot.com

    • ANSWER:
      Just another "get rich quick scheme".

      Per their web site:

      ---We are now earning more money online EVERY MONTH than the most people make in a year.
      ---only business you can start with under 0 and make over ,000/mth
      ---

      Amazing the number of shill websites that post a nearly identical stories and refer you to the "Wealthy Affiliate" website. A technique used to drown out any negative legitimate reviews by posting thousands of your own phony reviews.

15. QUESTION:
    Is My Review Effective?
    I have been using a certain membership site for learning how to generate affiliate income with pretty good success so I did a full review of the website but I'm not sure if what I put together is very effective yet.

    Anyone can take a look at it and let me know..........actually I would prefer people who are NOT in Internet Marketing to take a look since they can let me know purely from an emotional response if it made them interested or not.

    The review is at http://www.squidoo.com/inside-wealthy-affiliate

    • ANSWER:
      I looked at the first page of the website - here are my reactions.
      1. Puzzled what 'wealthy affiliate' was, and a bit suspicious it was 'get rich quick' junk. I think it needed some quality fact up front to convince me of its integrity and convince me to spend more time their.
      2. I thought you needed to 'entertain' more - ie give me a source of pleasure such as an entertaining cartoon or quote, or question and answer interactive assessment, to draw me in.

      Hope this is helpfull feedback for you.

16. QUESTION:
    Maverick Money Makers? good or bad? Wealthy affiliates? legit online jobs?
    I am about to join one of the 3 websites above, i would like to know if anyone has experience on the three or if anyone knows which is best, I have heard nothing but great reviews for all 3. soo just help me narrow them down, thanks

    • ANSWER:
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17. QUESTION:
    DON'T SPAM/SCAM me! Internet Marketing?
    Are any of you internet marketers what have you done? What are yo doing? I wa thinking about joining hte wealthy affiliate but...I want some honest reviews

    What have you done

    • ANSWER:
      Yep, I'm a young full-time Internet Marketer (currently busy with website flipping & creating my own products) and still running affiliate sites which pays for my monthly expenses. Lucky you I'm one of Wealthy Affiliate members. So here my Wealthy Affiliate review (a quick one).

      I've been with Wealthy Affiliate for more than a year (still subscribing ), what I can say about Wealthy Affiliate... it is suitable for Beginners (Zero Knowledge) - Advanced Internet Marketers. There are experts inside there willing to help (forum), although there is one great section that I most like besides forum, which is "Training Center" a.k.a Sharezone. It has 9 categories:

      - Article Marketing (112+ sources)
      - Email Marketing (18+ sources)
      - Pay-Per-Click (27+ sources)
      - Research (44+ sources)
      - Search Engine Optimization (17+ sources)
      - WA System Tutorials (47+ sources)
      - Web Hosting (19+ sources)
      - Web Development (54+ sources)
      - Miscellaneous (108+ sources)
      - Accreditation Course [Article Marketing & SEO Course (Separate Price - One time payment)]

      *ALL the sources on each category is growing, keeping pace with the latest trend of each category.

      Each of category has its own expert and even though that, WA members are still contributing tutorials/guidance (Every Wealthy Affiliate members can access to it).

      Wealthy Affiliate Learning Tutorials & Guides (40+ sources) - Provided by Kyle & Carson, founders. These 40+ sources already enough for you to learn how to make money from affiliate marketing.

      As startup, you can start with "Getting Started" & following with the Wealthy Affiliate Action Plan a.k.a 8 Week Action Plan (Been upgraded after known as Wealthy Affiliate Platinum) which will cover the foundation of Internet Marketing.

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      The Tools & Marketing Materials
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      ## Keyword Research Tool ##
      The tool offers the ability to create, manage, and export keyword lists as well and easily integrate with other tools at Wealthy Affiliate such as the Competition SPY tool and Keyword list builder.

      ## Site Rubix Website Builder ##
      Wealthy Affiliate Website Builder (Templates included)

      ## NicheQ Research System ##
      Profitable niches has already been unlocked, they (Kyle & Carson) did all the research and giving Wealthy Affiliate members the reports & resources. You also will get keyword lists for each niche, PLR articles, PLR guides, SEO keyword concepts, pre-written emails (you can use this for your email marketing campaign), website templates & access to private forum for specific niche. One new niche will be unlocked for every month until you get all (You are able to choose what kind of niche you want).

      ## Wealthy Affiliate Web Hosting ##
      Free web hosting, so you don't have to spend more on hosting that basically will cost you around - per month.

      Disk Space: UNLIMITED
      Bandwidth: UNLIMITED
      FTP Accounts: UNLIMITED
      MySQL DB: 10
      Email Accounts: 15
      PHPMyAdmin
      Domains Allowed: UNLIMITED
      Subdomains: UNLIMITED
      Domain Aliases: UNLIMITED
      Domain Forwarding
      Frame Forwarding
      Stats Reporting

      You just need to get your own domain that only will cost you around - (.COMs .NETs .ORGs) per year, then you can host it at Wealthy Affiliate. The place I would recommend for you to purchase domain name is at Godaddy.com. And currently .INFOs domain name is only cost you [FAQ-ANSWER].99 for the first year. You can check out the discount code at fatwallet.com.

      *Previously we only getting 3 domains to be hosted there and limited Diskspace, but now... UNLIMITED! Cut you cost don't you?

      ## My-Linker Cloaking Tool ##
      This tool is to cloak your affiliate links to avoid from people stealing your sales and you also can track how many clicks receives. You can use this to check which keywords are performing better. This helps you to manage your campaign. What I can say, tracking is one of most important to optimize your campaign. You can analyze and optimize or eliminates which are not perform well.

      ## Clickbank Research Tool ##
      Clickbank is one of the most basic (easiest) to get involved, but Clickbank marketplace search functionality is very limited and lack of useful information. With this tool, you can determine whether the product you are going to promote is Hot or Not. You can also get Top New Products and Hot 20 picks at Clickbank marketplace.

      ## Rapid Writer ##
      This is one great tool been provided, you can use this to optimize your content (article) for your website. You can use this tool to create unique content, which commonly unique is the power. It will help boost your website SERP (Search Engine Results Page) ranking. Infact, this tool is also useful to spin articles. If you have PLR articles, you can use this tool to make it unique to be used for your web contents.

      ## Turnkey Feeder Sites ##
      Too lazy to build website? You can use these feeder sites to start with but... I don't recommend it much, I would recommend you to start with article marketing (cost free) where you can use Squidoo as for example if you are too lazy to build a website (you can get all the resources about article marketing at Wealthy Affiliate Training Center).

      ## Website Templates ##
      Upload the template you want to your web hosting and you only need to add contents for your website. Designing your web? Done with the templates.

      ## STF Marketing Blueprint ##
      A niche that has already been researched, they provide you a blueprint for this niche. You also will get Promo Guide, Ready-to-promote Feeder Sites with Keywords & Keyword Lists.

      ## Keyword Lists (For Top Niches) ##
      Researching for keywords could be a tedious work (you will find this easy once you have experience), with keyword lists been provided... it can speed up your campaign by giving you ideas or using the exact keywords provided. Keywords is one of very important aspect, you need targeted traffic (visitors) if you want to get higher sales conversion.

      ## Tasks & Goals ##
      Setting your tasks & goals is important to keep up the pace with what you are doing or will be doing. It just like you pin point a note to your calender (scheduling).

      ## Campaign Manager ##
      With this system you can keep track of your revenue and expenses for your campaign. Sometimes we forgot how many have we spent (expenses), obviously you don't want to overspent for your campaign.

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      The Community
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      ## Wealthy Affiliate Space ##
      You will have your own Wealthy Affiliate space inside it where you can add your own blog, pictures, showcase your websites and you also can get connected with everybody inside it by adding buddy (just like Myspace & Facebook but not that advance ).

      ## Forum ##
      This is the gold mine, you can get a lot information inside Wealthy Affiliate Forum. Most of the discussion inside here. Having troubles? Need support? Got questions? You can ask there at anytime you want... from my judgment, they are really nice community.

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      Want to Make Quick Money after being one of Wealthy Affiliate?
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      You can get your first online, how? It's called Wealthy Affiliate Gold. Have you noticed some of website using "Thanks" button to show appreciation? Same applies inside Wealthy Affiliate but the only different is, it is a true gold (money). Being active and participating inside Wealthy Affiliate can earn you gold, even if you write a short inspiring story also can help you earn gold. 1 gold is equal to [FAQ-ANSWER].10. You can cash it out to your PayPal account once it reached .00 (10 gold). Easy huh?

      There are other ways for you to make money from Wealthy Affiliate;

      *** Wealthy Affiliate Jobs ***
      If you have skill(s) such as web/graphic designing, you can offer to Wealthy Affiliate members for the work. Do the work for the community and get paid.

      *** Wealthy Affiliate (Affiliate System) ***
      Refer a people to Wealthy Affiliate and earn .00 (recurring monthly) or 5.00 if the person you bring to Wealthy Affiliate subscribing it for a year. You also will be guided through Wealthy Affiliate Super Affiliate Program inside Wealthy Affiliate.

      The things you will get inside it:

      - Super Affiliate Journey by Marcus (.pdf - Las Vegas Conference in 2009!)
      - Wealthy Affiliate Super Affiliate PPC Course
      - Wealthy Affiliate Super Affiliate Article Marketing Course
      - Target Audiences (Targeting Specific Audiences)
      - Website Templates (Wealthy Affiliate Website Templates)
      - Article Keyword Concepts (Grab you SEO Keywords here)
      - Forum Marketing (How to promote Wealthy Affiliate in forums)
      - Ready to Use Websites (Wealthy Affiliate Affiliate Program Feeder Sites)
      - Opt-in Email Marketing (Promote Wealthy Affiliate with Email Marketing)
      - Download Banners (Banners to be used to promote Wealthy Affiliate)

      **I have wrote the details about Wealthy Affiliate Gold, Wealthy Affiliate Jobs & Wealthy Affiliate Affiliate Program (Wealthy Affiliate Secret Cash) one time ago. You can download it at http://www.wealthyaffiliatefree.com Just enter your name & email, confirm the email that will be sent to you after that and I will send you the guide (.pdf) in the second email.

      However, the info I wrote is based on the old Wealthy Affiliate interface (now is Wealthy Affiliate Platinum) but the information is still useful because the system is still the same. I've been busy with other campaign, that's why the guide I wrote inside Wealthy Affiliate Secret Cash is not up-to-date with Wealthy Affiliate Platinum but I will update it once I done with my campaign.

      Good Luck then!

18. QUESTION:
    Internet Marketers for Real?
    There are so many review sites and even more products out there that supposedly help.

    I have brought so many products, that i am now skint beyond recognition. I have tried and tested so many, that they all are the same at the end of the day. I didn't realise until i was too skint to realise that. But, are these people really out to help you, or are they out to get rich and couldn't care less about who has brought?

    The reason i ask this is, the most popular forum for internet marketers is the Warrior Forum. Everytime i ask a question, which hasn't been asked before, i get kicked out. Wealthy Affiliate as well, i gave up there cos no one actually cares about you. They don't help.

    Is it worth me keep going at this? Even after three years?

    • ANSWER:
      Sorry you have not found your way, I was just listening to a coach talking about identifying and focusing on the primary obstacle to growth, which unfortunately one usually can't self analyze, from their experience traffic has never been the obstacle to a business's growth, (once a profitable model is in place one can always locate sources of traffic)

      Commission Cloner WSO, one of the latest over priced programs (7) proposes methods to identify and duplicate winning cpa promotions, eliminating the big money losing phase of Arbitrage Conspiracy program, where they taught one to throw a bunch of offers on the wall to discover the one that sticks. I mention these because more than one programs have suggested promoting cpa with ppv advertising is one of the fastest ways to get going, in contrast with seo affiliate sales traffic which seems to take forever.

      One blog title that matching your user name thinking, cantgetrich.com seems more optimistic now, than when he started it in 2007. (I had to look up the GB term skint not used in the U.S.)

19. QUESTION:
    Does this essay flow?
    Parents are the best teachers when it comes to their children’s careers. For generations, our parents have been taught to go straight to college after high school, in hopes of landing the perfect job. That has been the so called “American Dream” for far too long, and parents are implementing that same mentality in their children’s lives. Attending college is the smart choice; however parents should show their children that there is more to life than having the perfect job, and my parents did an immaculate job showing me. They have constantly lectured me on the importance of becoming a successful entrepreneur, and one day establishing my own businesses. The number one lesson they taught me is that I could never become wealthy as an employee. I truly appreciated the fact that I was given a different outlook on the real world because I have taken their guidance and used it to my advantage. Just by knowing this information, I have been able to start a business in e-commerce, invest in the stock market, and even receive my real estate license. Of all the industries that I have been introduced too, I believe that real estate has interested me the most.
    When I was about sixteen years old, my parents introduced me to the business of real estate sales. They would always take me to local real estate seminars and investment clubs hosted by some of the most renowned real estate entrepreneurs in the country, such as Donald Trump and Hilary "Zig" Ziglar. At that time, it was hard for me to appreciate the opportunity to even be allowed in theses events, but as I got older I understood why my parents took me with them. They just wanted me to be in the environment of other successful entrepreneurs. After understanding their intentions, I began to enjoy the seminars. From that moment on, I dressed professionally and carried a notebook to every seminar. I learned a lot from attending the real estate investor meetings, and I was eager to share in their success. The first job they gave me was to be their assistant. I became responsible for various tasks such as; confirming appointments with clients, and reviewing and completing listing, purchase, and lease contracts. Furthermore, I assisted with lead generating via direct mail, door to door advertising, along with online marketing using Top Producer (a real time lead generating and contact management database), Facebook and MySpace. Once I turned eighteen, I was eligible to become a licensed real estate agent, so in the summer of 2007, I enrolled at the Long and Foster Institute. I successfully completed the course, and received my real estate license. Since becoming licensed, I affiliated with Keller Williams Realty. At the end of the day, everything I learned from my parents benefited me as I got older. As an alternative of being an employee for the rest of my life, I have what it takes to establish my own businesses and provide a bright future for my family.

    If not, how can I improve it? What can the second paragraph be about
    It has to be 250- 500 words... I cant really express my thought in such a short paper.

    • ANSWER:
      Your general subject is fine, but the way you write not so much.
      The way you have laid out your essay is very messy. You need to gather your thoughts before putting pen to paper. For instance, starting with your first sentence- it begins general and third person. Then, suddenly, you change to first.You need a transition sentence here. "That has been the so called “American Dream” for far too long, and parents are implementing that same mentality in their children’s lives."- this makes it seem like you don't agree with the concept of the American Dream because you say its been called that for "far too long". If you dont agree with it, ok, but add something after this sentence to sort of explain your thoughts or just delete the for far too long part. "Of all the industries that I have been introduced too, I believe that real estate has interested me the most."- use to instead of too in this sentence. Other things like this I have found throughout your passage, and a little re reading and correcting won't hurt.
      You ask what you could put in your second paragraph- the paragraph you originally have is way too long to be just one.( see what i mean about how your layout is messy?) Before you write,plan out your five paragraphs or more in which you first think of your introduction and thesis statement, then your first topic (maybe what your parents did when you were young) your second topic (maybe how you began to be successful) your third topic (maybe how you credit your success to your parent's and how you appreciate it) and then last but not least your conclusion. You can add more paragraphs to your body, but before you start writing, think. Good luck!